中國這些年,經濟發展迅速,國民生活水平提高,越來越有錢了,中國的國際地位和國際影響力也是越來越重,物質水平提高了,人們就開始追求精神生活。于是許多人出國旅游或是留學。出國留學網獲悉,國外的教育制度,和生活環境相對中國要好一些,加上許多中國人在國外工作的,所以,出國留學越來越熱。
你知道美國研究生留學ps的六大失敗類型么?它們分別是重復簡歷型、學校介紹型、抄襲句式型、救世主型、猶抱琵琶型、言幼稚型。所以,為了不讓諸位童鞋在美國留學文書寫作過程中犯下錯誤,在今天的文章中,小編就來為您逐一介紹一番!速來圍觀!
一、重復簡歷型
I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university
點評:美國研究生留學個人陳述不要去重復簡歷中的東西,這在很多學校的PS要求中明確提到,個人陳述的寫作要具體到事件上,事件解決上,而不要單純重復已有的內容。
二、學校介紹型
I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.
點評:該同學的美國研究生留學個人陳述開頭等于是一個申請學校的簡介,這好像是在幫助學校做宣傳,或表達你有多了解該學校,而不是寫個人陳述了。這是沒有意義的開頭,白白浪費了字數,最容易被秒據掉。
三、抄襲句式型
As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.
點評:Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 這種句式不知道是從哪里學到的,很多同學在用。但你要知道,老外最恨抄襲,最喜原創,所以利害關系大家想想吧。
四、救世主型
I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …
點評:一副救世主的形象,小時候就受富蘭克林的影響,立志改變世界。個人陳述的寫作一定要個人化具體化,別吹大牛,甚至帶著一種霸權主義思維。
五、猶抱琵琶型
Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.
點評:重點放在自己要做重大決定上了,人生的轉折點,然后來上句所謂名言警句。浪費字數,有限的字數里,同學們應該學會直接,并且抓住重點,突出自己最有優勢的方面,最有特色的方面。
六、言幼稚型
'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.
點評:上來就回憶童年少年自己如何有著遠大抱負,who cares。個人陳述字數有限,卻用這么多話描述童年,沒有任何意義。學校想知道你如何看待未來,而不是如何度過過去。
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